Just Yesterday

Awww, this is a sad story, Kababayan. And you have presented it beautifully that it hurt so much.

This was a beautiful piece - another favorite from you. I totally understood what was happening through the entire thing but the description at the bottom added to the emotional depth of the piece as well.

5/5 and Keep on writing

Amazing poem pink.....you really must have understood what he was feeling to write such a poem

Beautifully presented

Such a touching poem, it must be very painful to lose someone like that, especially so unexpectedly. It would be hard to come to terms with a reality like that, which you displayed well through the denial in the poem, the insistence that the girl is only sleeping.

The only thing I'm not so keen on is the last line. 'Cause' sounds a bit informal and in love should have a space. But aside from the grammar, I just don't think it fits as well as the rest of the poem. It interrupts the flow a little, in my opinion.

Beautiful poem though :)