Thoughts:

by Scott Cole   Apr 28, 2016


I wanna write the deepest poem
One that really makes you think,
And pry inside your hollow head
Just like a surgeon or a shrink.

You will never feel a single thing
I'll be as gentle as they come,
You'll hardly even know I'm there
Until I'm almost completely done.

With yout thinking cap in hand
And your scratching fingers numb,
You both ponder and you wonder
For just a tidbit or small crumb.

With the turning of your wheels
From the stress that's put on you,
Hopefully soon you will remember
With some help from all my clues.

Your bells and whistles will celebrate
When you've figured out my rhyme,
I'm a figment of your imagination
Cause I only exist inside your mind.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Scott I like your poem, it needs a bit of tweaking with regards to punctuation and I think section 4 should be your instead of yourt. and tidbit should be titbit

    Maybe change hollow head to inner as hollow implies the reader has no brain lol.
    The rest is very good. I like very much the ending that its all part of the readers imagination.

    I find myself checking and double checking my poems even once they are published and still find I have the odd typo or punctuation out of place so it is quite common. All the best Milly xx