Okay - i was completely hooked, then the end BOOM! I just burst out laughing in the office and everyone looked at me weird haha oops!
3 years ago
Man... the entire poem you had me appreciating how "damn poetic" everything was, the language, the excellent imagery, and BAM! That ending. What a fascinating write with a completely unexpected twist-ending. Quality stuff!
Seriously, I am like in a floating mode then suddenly fell to the ground with the ending! Isn't this clever? Alex, of all the things your atoms can go into, this idea here is crazy - in a good way! Got me right there. :-)