time is...

by Robert Long   Oct 20, 2017


time is consumed
time goes by
time never stops
for it is shy

time is valued
time is wasted
and you'll waste away
trying to chase it

make use of time
while you still have it
enjoy your life
before you lose it

for life's too precious
to waste on fights
so achieve what you can
and soar to new heights

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  • 2 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    Life is very precious and we are granted only one. We live and learn and take it one moment at the time. Thank you for sharing. All the very best

  • 2 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I liked this very much and actually the repetition didnt annoy me. For me I have found that repetition works very well when used with shorter lines. (But as in all pieces of art people have different preferences) . I think it's punchy and offers up valuable advice. One of your best more recent pieces. Milly x

    • 2 years ago

      by Robert Long

      thank you milly i recently found my want to write again and hope i can keep at this

  • 2 years ago

    by BlueJay

    While I truly enjoy the concept of this piece and how much voice and personality you were able to pack into such a short thing, I do have some criticism.

    The first two stanzas should not both start with time is time is, if you wanted to give that more power you should have separated them a little more so that the repetition gained more oomph and intention. Also, the lack of punctuation and capitalization thing- while that is totally stylistic and up to you (believe me, I'm all for it) it did make this piece feel as though it was missing something. Like a gumbo or soup that has meat and veggies but no spices at all. (I hope that makes sense.)

    I'd love to read more of your work when I have a little more time, but I think you definitely have a knack for this!

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