Melting Moments

DD, you created the suspense throughout.
The last stanza tells it's not a sensual one.
Though the Imaginary looks sensual throughout the poem, at the same time it's...

Visual is in these lines..

First setting eyes on you
the desire is overwhelming...

DD, the first time I saw it I felt the same emotional effect.
It is so overpowering that it can make God feel weak at his knees.
Even God has to find a way to pull himself out of it.

Olfactory in..

Salivating at the thought of you, lapping at your delicious cream...

DD, I used to get excited thinking about the oreos'. I took a corner in the house where my sister couldn't find me or the parents.
Sister wanted me to share it with her and parents were scared of cavities. But somehow I always managed to commit this heavenly sin.

Tactile in these lines..

As I lick your creamy center
I get two different tastes
One of a dark chocolate
The other an intense white...

DD, I guess everyone has their time with oreo cookies and this poem takes us to those moments we used to spend inside the shell of its dark chocolate and as we started to lick its cream we saw this world is melting, like there is nothing in between us and oreo; like this world doesn't exist anymore.

Audio in..

Your hard outside shell...
DD, though you have taken its bite, yet I can hear its crunch.
It is so irresistible, one can't stop himself from moaning.
I used to do it to tease my sister.

I found one alliteration - creamy center.

You chose the most appropriate title, the imaginary is delicious just as Oreo, the language throughout is salivating.
It is not something we get to read every day.
I respect the judges decision. I know, it's easy to say but it's hard to choose three among the 30, but at the same time I believe that a creativity like that should be fully appreciated just like the other categories.
The last stanza leaves you with a smile on your face.
There is a hidden cuteness in this poem, and one can't find it until he/she reads the last stanza.
DD, I don't know what else to mention besides that I enjoyed every bite of this poem.
Loved it:)

*You’re hard outside shell = Your hard outside shell

I really thought you had submitted a risqué piece for a bit there, I was like daaaaaaamn! Not that there would be anything wrong with that :)

Loved it! Great job darling :)
S

I love this nams...
but crumbs- Oreo's not my cup of biscuit haha
Very clever piece lady
much love
Michael x

Woah Nams! Nicely done lol....I wasn't quite sure where you were heading with this. I too will never look at an Oreo cookie the same way again- :)

I'm surprised that Senyru hasn't come across this yet, or if he has that there is no comment. But either way this is still well written, interesting, and absolutely unique.