it is always nice to see a sonnet posted. Kitty, is right when she talks about the musical flow being halted. With a sonnet, the flow should rise and fall with as the unstressed and stressed syllables are spoken.
My advice is to look on you tube, as there are some good videos where the 'musical flow' ie. meter can be heard and is explained.
As for the content of the poem, it rhymes well and imparts wisdom for the readers.
Thanks Mr Darcy and kitty
As I said it was just an attempt. I wrote it 5 months back for some contest. I won it because I was the only participant. I will definitely learn about the musical flow from YouTube.
Shane I absolutely love the content of this. I'm far too early in my own sonnet attempts to give you pointers on the meter - but I think it could be improved in places as there are some words that halt the musical flow. Certainly the rhyme scheme and syllable count are spot on. Hopefully one of the experienced sonnet gurus will give you some pointers - it was really helpful to me to get their input :-) x