A Wise Man

by Jack   Apr 23, 2021


A Wise Man

A kid walked up to the wise man,
And that is were it all began.

He said what are you doing my son,
He said I need you, you're the only one.

Well what do you need my trusted friend,
He didn't know so I started to pretend.

I know you are lying, I am a smart guy,
And he look directly into the kid's eye.

The most beautiful things you cannot see,
I know it's true, take it from me.

But what about the things I've seen,
But the man said not even his happiest dream.

He just said thanks and I will always remember you,
And just that day the kid's mind grew.

That was the wise man's last day,
And the kid knew he had to walk away.

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Jack 2021

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  • 2 years ago

    by Keira Pickard

    I enjoyed all of the poem, but the fifth stanza was absolutely amazing, I have to say! It's a very true message, and a good one at that.
    It's well rhymed and interesting. I love poems that tell a story and you've told it perfectly.
    I didn't think they were any problems at all with the context - I thought it was all well worded and also well thought out. But - as I am a grammar obsessed maniac, lol - I spotted a couple of ( unsurprisingly! ) grammar errors.
    1) in the last line of the second stanza, did you mean " you're the only one " instead of " your the only one", as 'you're' is a contraction of 'you are'?
    2) in the fourth stanza, I think in ' directly into the kids eye', ' kids ' needs an apostrophe before the s.
    3) in the fifth stanza ( my favourite!), There might be a typo in ' the most beautiful thinks you can't see'. ' the most beautiful THINGS you can't see'?
    4) in the second to last stanza, did you mean thanks instead of thank ?
    5) also in the second to last stanza, in the last line, see point 2!
    I might be mistaken myself, and (if I'm not) then these are really easy mistakes to make, which I do the whole time! You don't have to make any of the changes, either :)
    Anyway, aside from me being like a crotchety old English teacher, I really enjoyed your poem!

    • 2 years ago

      by Jack

      Thank you so much! I will go back and fix the mistakes!