Lies

by Sierra Rae   Aug 2, 2004


It isn't true
Forget what I said
It was all lies
Because I loved you
I tried to hide my sadness
But I couldn't fully move on
I said those mean things
And said I didn't care
Because anyways,
I didn't want you there.
I was just trying to pull your strings
I couldn't accept you were gone
it was like madness
But it's still not true
I just hated the cries
And wanting to be dead
But I don't hate you

I was trying a different style than my normal A.B.C.B rhyme scheme. This is A.B.C.D.E.F.G.H I H.G.F.E.D.C.B.A.. (forwards than backwards.) I don't know if it really worked...tell me what you think...

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  • 19 years ago

    by »«¤ß詤»«

    well for trying sumtin different u sure did a dam good job!!!! lol brilliant poem!! >>5/5<<
    bec xXx

  • 19 years ago

    by megan

    hey biotch whats up! havent talked to you in a while! and yes ur rhyme scheme is good!

  • 19 years ago

    by Allen

    hehe, cool poem, very interesting scheme, I do prefer the normal ABCB scheme tho... not too creative am I :P either way, that was a great poem, and its very neat of you to try out new rhyme schemes :) keep it up :D

  • 19 years ago

    by Sierra Rae

    *sticks tongue out at Sean Allen* Thanks for noticing...but the same difference!!!!! LoL!!!

  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    You did a pretty good job with your new scheme, but you sort of made a few mistakes. A and D rhyme with each other, so your poem is sorta a....
    A B C A E F G H I H G F E A C B A
    which certainly is interesting enough... lol good work.

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