Daddy, Please Stop.

by Marta   Feb 18, 2005


-I found this poem in my desk drawer. I wrote it in grade 5, it's true and I thought I'd post it.

Daddy can you please just stop?
I never meant to hurt you at all,
I thought I was smart to believe,
You wouldn't hit me against the wall.

Daddy can you please just stop?
Yelling and cursing those words,
Because each word kills me dad,
Making me silent and unheard.

Daddy can you please just stop?
Pushing my brother around,
Even though he's taking drugs,
He needs you there when he's down.

Daddy can you please just stop?
Blaming all of this on mommy,
Because really, it's not her fault,
Why your kids feel sad and empty.

Daddy can you please just stop?
Taking out your leather belt,
And try to put us in our place,
From all the things we've felt.

Daddy can you please just stop?
Mommy is really crying so hard,
She doesn't know what to do,
When her heart feels so scarred.

Daddy did you realize what you did?
When you finally reached the top,
You just went way too far daddy,
I just wish you could stop...

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  • 19 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Amilo said that she usually dislikes this style of poems, and I feel the same way. She goes on to state that this poem is different. I think there is a degree of emotionalism that is this poem's saving grace, so to speak. I found the rhyme to be overbearingly straight forward. I'm not sure what you could do to change that, its just my opinion that this poem suffers a bit due to the rhyme scheme.

  • 19 years ago

    by Janice Brown~©~

    I love it... i can picture this little kid pleading with her daddy to stop hurting the family... its so beautiful... love always janice xoxox

  • 19 years ago

    by Essence of Blight

    Hey hey! I love your poem and your rhyming! I wrote one somewaht like this too! I can relate. Good Job! Keep it up! Look into mine if you have time! Arrivederci!

  • 19 years ago

    by Amilo

    Usually I dislike this style of poems - where the rhyming structure is very obvious and it tells an average, sorrowful teenage story. But this is good. The repitition was captivating, and it was used very effectively to articulate this style of poetry. So for that, well done.

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