Sparks of the mind

by Jacob Perry   Feb 18, 2005


The last one left without a word
the last one left me unseen unheard
all in my head
or left on the page
thought insane
or known instead?
thought to be
or known to be dead?
to fade or be known
which are their fate
this ones survived that hellish fall of fate
then its left to be rated
left to be torn
left to be picked at
right after being born
what is this thing i speak of
you might ask me with glee
"is it me is you? is naturally seen?"
no it is neither though its in front of your face
there everywhere and know where
in every song and serenade
they are left in peoples note books
and left scratched into the floor
but unless their read
their nothing but some marks
the fire that created them
starts with only sparks
those from the mind
so continue to think
cause tomorrow they could be gone
in nothing but a blink

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  • 16 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    I think I understand this piece and can follow where it leads and what it means. Good one...

  • 17 years ago

    by Wip lost the Rhythm

    Which are their fate
    this ones survived that hellish fall of fate
    then its left to be rated

    I think you should use a different word instead of fate so that it's not used two times in a row, people might feel like it's over used.

    no it is neither though its in front of your face
    there everywhere and know where
    in every song and serenade
    they are left in peoples note books
    and left scratched into the floor

    those lines = love for me

    overall it's good but I think the ending could go to a different place, I feel like for me the ending is the easiest one for you so thats the one you took, it's almost too obvious for me. So I think you could work a little on that, I don't think it needs much work just a little, but overall it's really good and I like it !

    sorry if i was a little harsh*

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