The shattered dreams of infinance

by Jacob Perry   Aug 15, 2006


As the heavens fall and fire rises
and the goddess sighs her laments and strifes
the swell of eternity on a beach of life
the drownding victim sighs her sighs

the face of forever wrinkled with time
the lovers embrace eroded away
their universe shattered,
by the dream of infinance

Time the Instigator
Distance the Slayer
Hope the Destroyer
Love the Annihilator

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  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Very creative and deep poem. Nice descriptions and use of vocab. The first stanza's flow was nice, but the last two lines of the second stanza changed. Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by WIP

    "the drownding victim sighs her sighs"
    "the lovers embrace eroded away"
    "Time the Instigator
    Distance the Slayer
    Hope the Destroyer
    Love the Annihilator"

    those are my favorite lines, I like some of the language and the word choice, the pausing that maybe I add or it's just there, like it,like it, like it

    sorry but I can't think of anything that you could change, don't know what to say. But I like it and I'm sure your sick of hearing just that...

    maybe I can think of something to add later?..... sorry haha

    [WIP]
    aren't I a big help

  • 17 years ago

    by Fighter (Ariane L.)

    Wow.... im speechless....