Give Me My Chance to Shine

by Carmen   Feb 20, 2005


Why do you judge me,
just by what you see?
Do you even know what's within,
What's underneath this skin?

Is it my hair,
Or the clothes I wear?
Is it my face,
Is that the case?

Can't you see my pain,
How I struggle to stay sane,
When you degrade me,
Just upon what you see?

How could you do this?
I know I wouldn't be missed,
But is my life
Worth being taken by this knife?

I try to be nice,
But I'm just like spice;
Some like it, Some don't;
Giving it a chance, most won't.

Please just listen,
Give my chance to glisten.
Let me show you what's inside,
Let me come out, so I no longer have to hide.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    Good poem super choppy....5/5 though cause i like the idea and i think it's a really good poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    This poem says exactly how I feel, it's a great one, keep writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by x Saiya

    5/5 Beautiful
    It was well put together and yet another great poem! Nice work, and please look at mine too ;)
    Love
    Niki

  • 18 years ago

    by Atomic

    Excellent! I like the choice of topic M'Dear.

    "Please just listen,
    Give my chance to glisten.
    Let me show you what's inside,
    Let me come out, so I no longer have to hide."

    I especially like this stanza. =)

    ( )_( )
    (='.'=)
    (")-(") Arrivederci!

  • 18 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    Not bad, not bad, but some of the rymes need work, try rewriting a few lines here and there. 4/5