Secret Passage

by Kevin   Mar 18, 2005


About the age of things of
me and you i guess

mysterious the toys have gone
and birthdays steeped in fairy dust
replaced by paydays sugar crusted

curious to be the older
repeating wisdom so time weary

unaware as those newborn
of time being any different really
nothing like a border line
a change recorded to define
man from child and young from old

I felt it one day without being told

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  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    That was the truth about life. . it was realy nice work.
    you are a talented writer.
    i am giving you 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Kyra

    Hey i really liked this it had meaning.
    ~Kyra~

  • 18 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    I enjoyed this poem. You are very creative with your words and the metaphoric content linking one side of the story with the other. One thing that I think would help is adding punctuation because it helps the flow and meaning of what you are trying to convey. Representing the realisation of the journey and such, I didn't particularly like, it feels as if (in my opinion) that it lacks something. You're rhyming scheme was good that you did not always use it or force it; however it did strike me as odd when it for no reason, started rhyming.

  • 18 years ago

    by Poetically Speaking

    Wow, I really thought this was a great peice, you made me miss my old birthdays, lol.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lisa

    Kevin I thought this was a really wonderful piece, totally great ending, sometimes you read poems on the site and they are great the whole way through until you come to the end and its not the ending you thought it would be....but this was just perfect....keep writing.

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