Comments : Distorted Fairy Tale

  • 14 years ago

    by Julie

    (claps) Very well done. It about time the evil won. Poor angel, though. Oh well, there are always losses in war.

  • 14 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    O_O WOW. WOW.WOWWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOWOW.
    I love it. Hold on though hunnie, there's a happy ending coming for you....I love you sooooo much. I'll alwyas be here for you, I promise, I promise. *hugs oh so tightly* <3333 You rock babe...great write *thumbs up and extra hugs* You're my angel hun, and you will be happy, I know it. xxxxxxxxxxxxxx <33

    -Mortalidaga
    xxTakeCareHunxx

    Always a fan, always a friend.

  • 14 years ago

    by Nicholle

    great poem. i love the style it's written in. 5/5 keep it up.

  • 14 years ago

    by Ashley Van Eperen

    *.* ooo that was soo pretty! i really liked it..it sort of reminds me of the world...with good vs bad. its really good!

  • 14 years ago

    by David Paul

    It was ok. The only thing wrong with it that kind of hurt it bad was the fact that the stanzas were very uneven. I had to read each one 3 times before I got it. Other than that I love the idea. Good job and don't give up. kilman = David B. 4/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Kris Lynn

    I love this poem. Its a fairytale of today's world. LOVE IT!
    ~*~Christina Lynn~*~

  • 14 years ago

    by Rolo

    Hmm, okay. I always try to make sure my flow is decent and my stanzas are even...but I guess I'll try harder next time. I personally don't think they are uneven, but I'll keep an open mind. Thanks for the feedback!

  • 14 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    awsome i love the original ending great story 5/5....great choice of words

  • 14 years ago

    by Insane Inside And Out

    Great idea. I liked how you ended it. You did a good job. Keep up the writing!!

  • 14 years ago

    by shakenangel

    im really glad u tried something different, this poem is really cool. I love edgier poems, and this is really dark in a fascinating kind of way. 5/5!

  • 14 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    very well written, i enjoyed it, it flowed nicely and it was very creative!! keep it up!! 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by ღ Christina ღ

    Excellent poem! very well written

  • 14 years ago

    by Chad

    Excellent. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by undying blusher

    That is amazing! I haven't read anything like that before. I love the feel of the fairy tale...the rhyming is perfect...and the way you use the Angel...it truly amazes me how outstanding this is. Glad I read it. :) Thanks.

    xxx

  • 14 years ago

    by Emilia

    wow, great poem!! I voted a 5 on this one.. great work.. keep it up.. hugs!

  • 14 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Vey unique and excellent write.

  • 14 years ago

    by Danielle

    Awesome> I loved the words you used. Great write !

    If this is who I'm thinking of. WHERE YOU BEEN GIRL?!

  • 14 years ago

    by Katie

    That was such an awsome poem. A truly great write! I love the story line, as tragic as it may be. It reminds me of the stories of a lot of girls on this site. 5/5! keep up the talent!

  • 14 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Cool idea.. i liked most of it.. i dont believe wouldst is a word, and these 2 lines dont form a complete sentence.. i would say add 'and' to connect them,.. but i cant see that being what ur tryin to express.. i really dont know how to say that with it being a complete sentence.. maybe u dont even mind.. just some thoughts.. pZ

    Came the Angel with all her beauty
    Went the villain to fulfill his duty

  • 14 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    You try it...and it turns out like...wow...that's totally awesome...and I can't believe you are still here(I mean on P&Q)...you are here since 2003...and you are still here...and I'm so glad...cause your poem are so good...I can't wait to check out more...unfortunately...I have to wait for tomorrow...gonna off the com now...hope you write more...