Cutting Smile

I'm speechless....another brilliant poem....I relate 101 % to this one, I know your pain!!! My fave part:

It's easy to mask
My cutting smile
I'll do this until
911 you'll have to dial

sadly some one called 911 on me when I tried to commit suicide....

*Hugs Sabrina*

I liked this. It flowed good and it was pretty good overall. The idea is repeated and not origanal but it was still prettty good. I give it a 4/5. your a great writer though!

Much Love
~*hAiLy*~

Your rhyming is a little rocky in this poem, but overall, it's good. It's original, not on the content, but the way you phrased things and the way you thought about it. I loved your last two stanzas "The worst is over This feels better than you (Better then a small kiss Cut me up in two) (Tears are my way To saying bad bye) Blood is the new way A smile is still a lie" [Especially the phrases i put in parenthesis]. Nice. Keep working on it.

XxX))Eclipse((XxX

It's a little cliche, because nowadays everybody writes about cutting (no offense!), but it still has a nice ring to it : )

I liked this best:

Blood is the new way
A smile is still a lie

♥Niki

a bit confusiing at times but other then that nice job...keep it up luv yas mwah

-kayla-