The only thing i remember

by XxTeArSxX17   Aug 20, 2005


THE ONLY THING I REMEMBER

A thousand tears in my eyes
A million knifes in my heart
And pain I cant get over
And darkness is everywhere

I thought you save me from myself
I though you understood
But the fact still remain
That everything is gone

I have nothing left to hold on to
I have nothing left to stay here for
My love has disappeared
My heart feels nothing no more

I only ever wanted was for
Some one like you to care,
And for some one like you to be there

I just hurt to much, I have to much pain
And all this pain I cant bare
I want it gone no longer there
But I am alone and pain is the only home I
Have ever known.

The darkness consumes me and I have no one
I don’t even have my self no more
I lost everything. I ever had
To tell you the truth I don’t remember
Being happy I only remember being sad

~Ashleigh~
8/20/2005

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  • 18 years ago

    by xxxFull Of Painxxx

    Very good poem i feel exactly like that..and thanks 4 commentin on my poems glad sumbody can relate...good work

  • 18 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    The flow was broken in the middle, not bad, i liked it, it was captivating. 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jacqui Armstrong

    Deep poem sad.
    but still a great poem
    keep up the good work

    Jacs
    xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Heartfelt,.. i noticed a lot of punctuation error,.. ill only list one thing.. usually people dont take heed to such superficial criticism ne way.. so the line below isnt really a sentence,.. true some people may say it like this.. the words 'was for' do not really need to be there.

    I only ever wanted was for
    Some one like you to care,

    overall, this is a decent piece,.. no consistent rhyming scheme, and even the flow was a lil chaotic. nothing a revision couldnt fix, if you so choose.. 4/5.. pZ :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Mat

    Wasn't sure it would happen, but things got more intense this time. Great poem, I can see you either really thought this through or you were really really upset when you wrote this

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