Down on me
by shawn hoskins Sep 21, 2005
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Why are you down on me,look at yourself were not the same you see,i'd don't want your pity you can keep it to yourself,you're nothing but a small man hiding in his little shell,keep your comments i could care less to hear,stay far away i don't want you near,you think your different that's right were not the same,you're just a useless junky that likes to share his shame. |
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18 years ago
by N J Thornton
Good. You do very well with putting your intense emotions into the poetry you write. I, as a reader, can really feel your words.
However, You said "your" twice in the poem, when you meant "you're."
"Your" means it belongs to. "You're" is you are.
Apart from that, good job! Keep writing. -
18 years agoby Jason Meres
Again, love the flow, love the poem. Just wish it was in some coherent form. Well done.
