Withdrawal

by shawn hoskins   Mar 16, 2008


Addiction is awful im so full of doubt, withdrawal is something i never took the time to think about, I sit here trembling seems i have the shakes I need something to calm my nerves I've had about all of this i can take, I hide the pain inside so well those closest to me don't even know I'm going through this hell, I'll just take another sleeping pill to get me through the night I just want to be normal but i feel hopeless with no end in sight

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  • 14 years ago

    by Broken Masquerade

    Wow. I know this feeling far too well. This poem is so relatable. You expressed your emotions so well. I sort of like this layout instead of the typical, cause i get the feeling you're writing from the heart. I really enjoyed reading this. Well done :) 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Good Enough

    Wen i was addicted to alcohol and i finally quit i felt the same way as the poem. another great poem. the rhyming is good and u can actually feel the pain

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem is well written and as we say in rehab, admiting you are powerless to addiction is the first step to recovery

  • 15 years ago

    by ALEX

    I know you're not into writing in stanzas,
    but YOUR RHYMING IS GREAT!
    This poem would be enhanced so much if you would just put in the line breaks where you meant them to be!

    Overall, very honest storytelling. I felt a real connection to the speaker, which is obviously the point of any poem. Good job, but please take my advice about the lines.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Try penning it out like this...

    Addiction is awful
    im so full of doubt,
    withdrawal is something
    i never took the time to think about,

    I sit here trembling
    seems i have the shakes
    I need something to calm my nerves
    I've had about all of this i can take,

    I hide the pain inside so very well
    those closest to me don't even know
    I'm going through this hell,
    I'll just take another sleeping pill
    to get me through the night

    I just want to be normal
    but i feel hopeless with no end in sight

    ^^
    Hope this helps... this is the way to break a poem up into stanza's. It allows the reader to read it more easily without taking away from the poem.

    Overall a nice job...

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