A Battle Lost. [Need Better Title?]

by Marta   Sep 21, 2005


Why does this world,
Still leave me sorrow?
Will my hope exist,
When I wake tomorrow?

But if I went to sleep
And never woke again
Will all of this agony
Continue to remain?

If life is so beautiful
When will I know its true
For I have lived to long
In a world so blue.

It's unfortunate to know
Such a pain so real
And it hurts so much
Waiting to heal.

Have I payed the price?
Because I know it's cost
And now I know the truth
For I have already lost.

:*(

I hope this made sense, it's hard to explain, one of those poems where you just vent everything out of yourself.
A battle between myself and the world.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Pretty pleasant read,.. structure was pretty uniform and the flow was quite fluid..

    Why does this world,
    Still leave me sorrow?

    though, to my knowledge, this is grammatically correct, using sorrow as you did does sound a bit awkward to me. doesnt really matter th0, if you like it, keep it. anyway,.. i dont have much else in the way of critiques. i think the title should suffice.. my favorite stanza was the fourth, and i enjoyed how each stanza was based off a question.. goodjob..