Last caress
by shawn hoskins Sep 22, 2005
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It's so painful to see her there laying on the bed crying she's hurting so bad there's no denying,the baby so young and sound asleep in my heart my love for them is so deep, i want to hold and comfort her and tell her everything's going to be alright i watch as she struggles to get up and turn out the light,she holds a picture and softly say's why did you have to die i miss you so much,i lay my hand on her head to caress her hair,but i no she can't feel my touch,a tear falls from my eye as it's time for me to go,i look at my little baby and i say love you,i'm the daddy you'll never know. |
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15 years ago
by Nicole
Aww! i love that! its great.
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16 years ago
by ECILA ice
Honestly that gives me a goose bumps and it was really sad.. simple poem but could really touch someone's heart. but to make it more interesting and captivating to the reader's eyes better reformat it, i mean arranged it in a way that it may look more of a poem than an essay (divide it into and lines and stanzas).. but it was still a flawless and touching poem.
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16 years ago
Awww how sad. I really liked your style, its different and unique..and it also fits. The flow was great and the poem definitely held emotion. Great job and keep it up.
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17 years ago
by beav
Wow. nice. the descriptions of her are so rich. it was very easy to visualize. so tragic. i can't fathom how this experience would feel like. this is a very good representation, i think. 5! thanks for your comment on 'halloween II', by the way! -beav
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17 years ago
by Kaylee
This poemw as so beautiful, hauntng , and sad. The ending was...can't describe it but I got a good vivid image form it. I just have to get used to the format because your poems are really worth reading.
