Suicide Replay.

by IWroteYouAPoemOnMyWrist   Oct 10, 2005


Just hit play, and watch my life fall apart
take a look at who broke my heart

see the times i was beat
the times i didn't eat
how many days i wouldn't speak
watch i got raped by the street
when i was called a Tramp, and got taunted and teased.

watch as i was hit and abused
screwed over, wasted and used
throw around punched and confused
too bad at that time no one new
all the things i was going threw

as your watching...
count all the slits
how many times have i cut my wrist
hot many nights did i get a razor blade kiss?
sad, theres a movie out like this.

"I dream of suicide"
did you notice I'm dead inside
I've been emptied out and lost all my pride
behind my eyes I'm forced to lie
i get no funeral and yet i dyed.

don't feel guilty as you see
the emptiness inside of me
i know this story's hard to believe
try to make the best you can of me.

dad thinks I'm alright
but he pressures me into his no good fights
beats me in the middle of the night
until I'm bleeding on the floor
he calls me names and slams the door
and i guess I'm just someone he takes his anger out on
I'm so confused but i still stand strong
but its been to long

this movie screen fades to black
the scene you just saw was the last
the one of me in the bathroom with the knife
trying to get over with this pain filled life

If you watched closely
You'd notice theres a missing scene
I'm surely not okay
Now My life's stuck on suicide replay

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  • 11 years ago

    by Stephanie Michelle

    That was amazing!! You're going onto my favourites list, definitely!

    A few things that I picked out while reading the poem that could be changed...

    "watch as i was hit and abused
    screwed over, wasted and used
    throw around punched and confused
    too bad at that time no one new
    all the things i was going threw"

    here "threw" should be "through"

    "as your watching...
    count all the slits
    how many times have i cut my wrist
    hot many nights did i get a razor blade kiss?
    sad, theres a movie out like this."

    theres = there's

    "I dream of suicide"
    did you notice I'm dead inside
    I've been emptied out and lost all my pride
    behind my eyes I'm forced to lie
    i get no funeral and yet i dyed.

    ^^ I get no funeral and yet I've died

    If you watched closely
    You'd notice theres a missing scene
    I'm surely not okay
    Now My life's stuck on suicide replay

    ^^ there's

    Great write overall!!! Amazing job with writing emotion into your poem.. Powerful and a perfect portrayal of the events inside the poem!

  • Wow its so real and powerfull...
    i know exactly what this poem is getting at

    well done

    xoxo

  • 15 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    Wow hun, I really loved this poem. Your described so well what you were feeling and put so much emotion and soul into you poem. It's definately something I can relate to. I have tried to kill myself eight times, and I have been a cutter for about a year. My heart goes out to you hunny, please hold on.

    -Mikochan

  • 15 years ago

    by erica

    AWESOME. i love it... rate on mine please!

  • 15 years ago

    by XxXcrystalXcontagiousXxX

    That was relly good can u read and rate some of my poems thanks bye

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