Painful Truth

by Christopher Liau   Oct 19, 2005


With the passing of every winters day,
You step gradually further away,
Stare as you walk from this place
My endeavors all go to waste.

My only crime, I care too much,
Wanted from you a single touch,
Unwilling to give, eager to blame,
Express my regret about being your shame.

Unstable to all eyes that watch,
Wonder if I'm just an extra notch,
Conversations have to be a must,
Just to argue off the last days of "us".

Excuses as far as the eye can see,
Why can't you be honest with me?
The painful truth is you never will,
I try despite the consequences, until...

My heart filled with an aching pain,
My thoughts of "us" to be slain,
Finally I give you my opinion true,
There is no future for me with you.

© Christopher Fowler
19th October 2005

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  • 18 years ago

    by Christopher Liau

    Thanks, i cant believe i didnt see that typo... must have slipped through seen as been is a word. I did infact mean for it to say be. thanks again for pointing it out

  • 18 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    Ooo, not bad.
    My thoughts of "us" to been slain,
    I think it would flow better to be written
    My thoughts of "us" to be slain
    that's all I could pick out, so I gave yu 5/5, it was entertaining, though i'm sorry to say the emotion in it felt rather weak.

  • 18 years ago

    by Carmen

    It was all good and perfect until the last line; it just didnt sound right. otherwise, perfect.

  • 18 years ago

    by BloodShotEyes

    Excellent poem. I loved it.

    *Blood Shot Eyes*

  • 18 years ago

    by Kayla

    Wow! I don't even know what to say...I seen this on one of the forums...thought it sounded like i'd have some emotion...but I wasn't expecting this...It touched me...thats how you know its good....great Job 5/5...Keep it up...the others are good as well

    check Me out

    xoxo
    Kayla

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