Abused and Suicide

by Bug1219   Oct 31, 2005


Bruised all over my body
i try to hide my bruises from my friends i keep this awful secret
whn someone yells at me
i run and hide in a corner
my friends see bruises and asked what happend to me all i say is
i fell, no big deal right? i say i will be fine. but i secretly know i
will have to live with it
i am bleeding all over my face
i know i will mot live much longer
i grab th knife and pray
for everyone and to god to help
me forgive and forget i wirte a
note saying good-bye then
i cut my wrist and just lay there in the floor nobody will find me for a day or two that was the last of the pain i will ever have now i am in a better place where i know no pain. A place call Heaven

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Okay.. the emotion and message in this poem were very strong.. but you really need to work on the flow and your spelling.. you cannot just end a line whenever you feel like it because then it is difficult to read.. i would advise that when you are finished writing a poem, to go over it and check for mistakes.. that way, you should not have too many spelling errors..

    whn someone yells at me
    ^ should be "when"

    i know i will mot live much longer
    ^ should be "not"

    i grab th knife and pray
    ^ should be "the"

    keep working on your flow and this should be good.. 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Very emotional. This was really deep. I'm really sorry if this happened. The flow wasnt that great, but still the overall poem was good. Great Job

  • 18 years ago

    by Juls

    I like this one...good emotion it makes it seem like the person is calling out for help and doesnt know how to get it. Well u know im here for u and u know my msn! I would check for spelling mistakes again though!
    Great work Juls

  • 18 years ago

    by HighPerfection

    I agree with raven suicide not the way out even tho i often dont ssay that in my poems

    ;'-(hillary)-';

  • 18 years ago

    by VioletRaven

    This is a very deep poem, I think a lot of people can relate to it. Including me.

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