The young dream

by VampyraKi†   Jan 5, 2006


The stars shone like diamonds
A soft pulse broke the silence
The gentleness of the breathing
Kept the girl alive and let him know
His fingers held he close and safe

The moon shone and the birds whispered soft tunes
She slowly awoke from her sleep
Her eyes sparkled in the moonlight when they met his
There they both held each other's gaze

The wind blew gently moving her hair
Neither moved nor breathed for a moment the world stood still
She broke the silence with an angels voice whispered "who are you?"

He smiled and his posture softened as he said
"Your knight and friend"
Her eyes glittered, as did his smile
Then he pulled her close and kissed her...

The girl's head hurt how far did she fall?
She needed something for the pain
Letting her mind drift back to her dream
How she longed for a knight to rescue her
To hold her in his arms and kiss her

Slowly the girl's eyes opened to the nurse's office
The boy from her class smiled
He pulled her into a tight embrace as he spoke
"You passed out again...you almost gave me a heart attack
By how far you fell this time"
His voice was shaky as if terrified of losing something
He hid his eyes by pulling the embrace tighter then before

She embraced him back him filling her senses
He pulled away and looked at her
Then pulled her back to him but kissing her lips
She melted in his arms how wonderful it was
When they pulled away he hugged her
And mumbled something about how she kissed him
And how it must be a dream
:a dream: she thought :I hope I never wake up:

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  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    That---that brought tears of joy to my eyes. It's so beautiful and sweet. Keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Emma

    Wow! that was great. i loved it. i loved the twist. a very diffrent style but it was great.
    Emma 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Samantha

    Very nice job... I like the story this poem plays out, its very good... The only problem I personally have with this poem is that the last few lines were a little bit confusing to me.. But other than that wonderful job... Keep it up!

    sammie

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Brilliant imergry, very clear and descriptive. and a great peice overall, the images are very clear and the feelings strong.

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Dreams

    I like the visuals you created. I feel like I’m seeing the dream played like a film before me. However though, it is quite confusing at some point because of the abrupt transition between reality and dream, but maybe that’s your intention. =)

    If I were to suggest anything, I’d suggest throwing in some lines to cut down the abrupt transition. Just a though, hope you don’t mind. =)
    Anyway, good effort there. Thanks for sharing. =)

    One more thing,
    'His fingers held he close and safe'
    I don't really get the meaning of this line.. Is there some typo error? Hmm, maybe it's just me. =D

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