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by Kim Jan 23, 2006
Sadness, depression /
You, my hooded falcon,
Once creened promises of love,
Enjoyed being touched by my hand
But I should have known
I could never keep you here
Child of the skies
So I cut your jesses
Unbound your lovely wings
And let you soar away to freedom
You never once looked back
So glad to be free of me, and my constrictions
So happy to turn your back and fly
So joyful of your new beginning
Was I that horrible?
The memories I once treasured seem so distant
And I no longer know if they're true
I won't chain you, so I let you go
But that doesn't stop my tears
A soft trill from the sky caught my attention
A quick glimpse of your shining eyes
by Lauren Waszkiewicz
The flow was not as good as the other i have already read(abt nature) but it was still good. i felt the emotions in it. you portrayed them very well. i also liked the overall metaphor of it. great job. =]
by Marc Ortiz
Amazing! good job! I like your style I have read 4 of your poems and I love them all :) keep writing my friend :)
This poem is amazing. literally. it amazed me. so much vivd imagery.. even though you didnt make the top 5 you were on the 6th or 7th, (you were on my -eligible- list.
the onyl thing i dont like about this poem is that i didnt know some of the language.. and it made me kind of mad.. (i got into it too much) lol.
Defiatly a 5!
Thankz for participating in my contest!
Powerful, great analogy and beautifully descriptive...