A Tragedy of Humanity

by Once an Angel   Feb 13, 2006


Understanding, understanding, my lone and desperate plea

Comprehension, comprehension, of this reality

Able to view, able to know, what blind eyes only see

An unknown truth, an unknown fact, a key to liberty

Inside this world, inside this realm, the one I've always known

Lies a secret, lies forgotten, underneath, never shown

Yet I've found it, yet I've learned it, a knowledge deeply sown

As if silent, as unspoken, my words remain alone

Hear my whisper; hear my echo, beyond your dying lands

Freedom's dormant; freedom's waiting, for you to take a stand

Share a smile, share some kindness, offer a helping hand

Only service, serving helpless, can brake your selfish bands

A better world, a safer home, the future that could be

If you would try, if you would strive, we might live happily.

Comprehension, comprehension, of our capacity

Understanding, understanding, my lone and desperate plea

I had some fun with the lay out of this poem. For each line I started out with a 4 syllable phrase, and then I repeated it with slight alterations but keeping it four syllables. And the last part of each line is six syllables long. So basically it is: 4-4-6. Also the last word of each group of four lines rhymes with the other lines, but that is kind of obvious.

The message of this poem was a big deal to me. I have made an effort to care about people who have a hard time in life for one reason or another because I want they to have a friend. I have found that many people life to insult and persecute others for their weaknesses and I just don't understand why people can see that as being right. I am appealed by how horrible some people are to each other, because I honestly don't get why they do that to eachother and why no one can see how much more profit can come from being friendly vs. hostile ergo this poem.

-Tainted Mikochan

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  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I reallly liked the style of this poem. I haven't seen it before on this site so far! I did like the message and really I can't think of a thing to improve on it. The only thing is now you've made me want to check out more of yours :) Keep writing. Don't stop.

  • 18 years ago

    by ~Fallen Angel~

    Loved this poem I haven't seen a poem like this on here truely original...I gave it a 5

  • 18 years ago

    by Allison

    I love this poem. It had a nice flow to it and I liked that way that you made it rhyme. It had a lovely style to it. Keep up the good work. You have a lot of talent. *5/5*

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This poem was really good & i understood the message you were trying to teach. i loved it. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Riffy

    This was awesome! I think the message shone through perfectly and it was very meaningful. T
    he structure you used was amazing because it had a sense of echo whilst reading it, and had a great effect on me.
    Take care,
    Luv Riffy xxx