Now i pretend to be.

by Jon Hunt   Mar 29, 2006


So now I try to pretend to be,
A someone who just isn't me.
And hope it takes the pain away,
To hope to see another day.
See as well another you,
Or better still a someone new.

For I'm lost for reason, lost for cause,
Love died young, so now I pause.
Take a breath and clear my head,
Resuscitate this love, that's never dead.
Try and find a better use instead,
For all before turned heel and fled.

But no use now, I strive for hope,
Try to relight flames, that never burnt,
But too intense, to close I'm hurt.

And there are many possible, like stars in the sky,
But like the stars far off they fly,
With no warmth gleamed from any alight,
And none as close to be here tonight.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Some of the words kinda screwed with the flow in the second stanza made it sound a little forced but overall it was really good. I loved the words which gave it a more vivid feel.
    ~Faith

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Wow. Awesome poem. I really felt the depth - you have a great technique. Keep up the excellent work.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by xDryTearsx

    This is soooo good.
    I dont think theres anything bad about this poem it was so good.
    your flow was like perfect and your imagry was amazing and i loved everything bout it.

  • 18 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Great imagery and rhtythm to this one adn the rhyming fitted perfectly, i also liked the repetition of 'someone' it made the tone very 'down-to-earth' xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren

    Wow. this is amazing. the first stanza really reminds me of what i'm going through. wanting to change myself so i could possiby be happy.
    this certainly deserves a way higher rating than 5. it's just so...beautifully written. there are no words to describe what i feel for this.
    just. amazing.
    lauren

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