by Sarah Ann Apr 24, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
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Somewhere in this world I see |
by amelia
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Excellent |
by LadyPearl
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Great job! Just one thing, the last line, it could be "And I can't seem to help her soul" Not too important, just the rhyme. |
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Well it was great with the rhyme scheme. Not really sure I liked this piece yet it had great flow and a cool word choice. Overall good job. |
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I know the feeling, very well written, beautiful work. 5/5 |