Battle of the Voices

by Sarah Ann   May 5, 2006


-When reading this poem you will notice some words or lines are fully typed in caps lock. This I done purposely only to emphasize that there are two speakers in this poem. On paper, with two different colored inks it would be more sufficient; but this was the only resort, just to make it easier for the reader to distinguish between the two.-

"Its fine," she simply said to me
"I will get over it one day"
"AND IF YOU DON'T?" My words trailed off
"Don't worry there's a way"

"These tears will stop, I promise you,
I will try hard to stay strong."
"AND IF YOU CAN'T?" My words trailed off
"Then I guess that I was wrong."

"I will be up and moving soon."
She said with solemn eyes,
"BUT WHAT HAPPENS IF-" (She cut me off)
"Then I'll live in this disguise"

"YOU LISTEN HERE," I scolded her
"I KNOW THIS MUCH IS TRUE
MARK MY WORDS AND EVERYTHING,
YOU CANNOT MAKE IT THROUGH."

"NO BUTS OR IFS ABOUT THIS NOW
YOU'RE A DISGRACE AND YOU ARE WEAK,
TURN BACK RIGHT NOW IN FOOLISHNESS
IF IT IS HAPPINESS YOU SEEK."

She nodded to me in darkness
And quivered down in fright,
"I can't believe I doubted you
When I know you're always right."

And so she walked along her way
As cold tears filled her eyes
And everyday I love her more
Because she leaves me satisfied.

((Okay basically, this poem is about a girl or even anyone who has trouble dealing with the double consciousness of themselves. One voice says one thing and another side says the other. Ever feel like that? Well I don't know, it happens to the girl and unfortunately, she moves to the pessimistic side, the one that told her she was weak and she can't stay strong, and so in conclusion I just wanted to point this out, because though we may not know it, so many of us are like this and have battles like this even more than once a day, without even knowing it. Constructive feedback would be greatly appreciated, I will definately return any favors.))

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  • 17 years ago

    by ChaoticSchemer

    I really liked the idea of this poem, it was well done. I understand the point you're trying to make, i seriously battle with myself like that all the time. It was well done, your rhyming is perfect with excellent rhythm, well done. Im reading alot of your poetry, and you are very talented. I like what you write about
    *keep smiling*
    katie

  • 18 years ago

    by Spanish Star

    I just loved this poem. Really beautiful written. I can so relate to the topic of the poem as well, as I am going threw something of the same right now. But anyhow. The hole poem was great, and I ecpecially loved the part:

    She nodded to me in darkness
    And quivered down in fright,
    "I can`t believe I doubtet you
    When I know you`re always right."

    That part gave me chills. Keep it up;)

  • 18 years ago

    by Nee

    Battles from Inside??? well, I'm already into this =( so I guess I know how it feels and I can so relate to your poem!!!
    firstly thanx for your sweet coments, meant alot to me..yours also make up my day and I luve reading them =)
    second:: the idea of this poem was inspiring, heartfelt(for me), wonderful and meaningful!
    probably bcuz I've never read such poem! so Yeah it deserved a 5 ^.^
    keep it up hun
    stay it touch
    Luv
    NemO x0x0x0x0x

  • 18 years ago

    by Just Sierra

    Girl...you have got to be my FAVORITE poet on this site. Your poetry is always so CREATIVE...and I used to have that edge, but now my brain's just gone dead...

    I loved it. I understood it the first time around...honestly, it was FANTASTIC!!!

    Amazing job!!! xoxoxox 10000000000/5