Take me Home..

"Kiss your soft delicate lips"
that line is so dreamy, like a butterfly fluttering it's delicate wings, singing a sorrowful song.
This poem had a really nice flow, i feel kind of lightheaded after reading it.
great job, 5./5

Aww amazing job hun.. Keep it up... LOve your work

Awe that was so sweet!! Your poetry has steadily been imporving and improving with each poem you write! Before you know it you'll be famouse! I don't know if you've noticed but your getting better and better on making poems flow just right with the beautiful words you write! It's always a joy to read your work! SO keep writting and I'll keep reading!

Did you win?
This had a cute litte country feel to it, I thought it was like a country song. The repetition of "take me home" worked well but I think the descriptions needed a bit more body and passion behind them.

[lost_laureate - come find me]

Aw that poem was so sweet. I loved it. you did a great job on this. I could definitely relate to it. The flow & rhythm of it really held up well & the repetition of "take me home" really put emphasis on the rest of the poem. Great job!