Please write him a goodbye

Your poem is very sweet and touching sorry that, that happend anyways i give you a 5/5
~danielle~

Wow this is good

Wow that is amazing
just want to tell you that i put you on my favorites hope thats ok with you
millsy

Oh, grammer.
I liked the topic of this poem.
I want to call it "intriquite". That doesn't make any sense but it's the first word that popped into my poet's mind.
I've taken-and, yes, possibly misjudged- you for the kind who can handle real critique. So, here is some:
Take a little more care as to punctuation. What I'm talking about is :
They say in marriage vows
Till death do us part
.

If someone says it, then it should be in quotation marks.
However, I've seen a couple times in poetry where the poet doesn't do that...so I suppose it's different and it's all up to you anyways.
What I'm trying to say, is if you don't want quotation marks, don't put them there.
Just a suggestion. ;)

Also, the rhyming appeared a tad bit cliche. Please don't take offense. I can't exactly critisize you for that, because it's one of my BBBBBIGESSTT problems...so it's also just a suggestion; if you want to think about it, your writing could be improved.
But you know... "if" and "when", so whatev.

*amanda

I thought this was really good.