Your Hurricane

I think it was fantastic up until the last 5 or 6 lines and then it seems like you got lost for exactly how to say what you wanted to say. Perhaps it's just me. It's very good though, and very emotional, which is what matters the most.

"apon my window pane" - should be "upon".

"This just cant be true." - should be "can't" (missing apostrophe)

I really like how it started but it seemed to get a little looser toward the end. Like perhaps you were having a hard time ending it or something. It wasn't nearly as descriptive as the beginning.

Great poem! I love the title of it-it sums up the poem. The simile throughout the whole thing was great. You have good description in it and the way you worded things was strong/powerful. Good write! 5/5

Hey nice poem- thanks for posting it because i enjoyed it, hehe
If you could, please check out some of my poems, preferebly If I
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