Not That Simple

by MemoirsOfMe   Jul 10, 2006


I'm tired of this deciet,
Red wine making this stain.
Trying to get back upon my feet.
It's a neverending pain.

How come you never came?
To save me from these fears?
Don't tell me it was the same
Back ago those many years.

Now I am talked to as if I am five
Unresponsive, an act of invisiability,
I wish I was never alive,
To escape this form of reality.

They give me advice,
I give them my life.
I say, "Please, just take it."
But I know it is not that simple.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    I think this was a great poem it was very deep as all of your poems are lol but this was extra special nice job!!

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    It was a pretty good poem. It was a little short though. I though maybe you could have gone into more detail too. The flow was okay. The rhyming felt a little forced though. I felt that you put a lot of emotion in it, so that was good. Overall this was not my favorite poem of yours but it was still okay. Keep writing!! =]

    Cayce x

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm, this was a bit better. The flow was not very good. I felt like I had to pause at every line in this one. But the topic, and the contents were great. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Another perfected perfection
    Indeed, i did enjoy it.
    No criticism from me my fellow poet.
    keep it up and push on.
    ~Emah

  • 17 years ago

    by Raychil

    This was a very interesting write, its deeper than the words on the screen. It speaks of someone leaving you alone...it's a lovely write. 5/5, in my opinion.

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