I will not give up

"Yes you killed me inside
But I wont die"

- This part in particular captured and kept my attention throughout the entire poem. I feel the same way about someone in particular.

"Yes you tore me apart
But I'm still in one piece"

- This is portrayed to perfection.

"Yes you took my dreams
But I wont give up hope
Yes you tortured me
But I will cope"

- This stanza literally brought me to tears.

"Yes you made me sick
But I'll live through this"

- Excellent line.

Overall, I love this piece. It describes things perfectly and actually gave me a bit of hope to move forward with. Please keep writing! :)

Very nice poem ...
21 years old yeah???
but still young with a very good mind...!

Way to go gurl..really a very very nice,inspiring poem..

Aww this is rele good poem!
keep up the good work x

The rhythm was good and it flowed together well, and it rhymed wonderfully.