Toxic Narcotic

by Natalie   Aug 11, 2006


Deprived future demolished by anguish,
Hidden beneath forbidden salt teardrops,
Concealed disguise unworthy for pageants,
Angry thunder flickering through tree tops.

Flashing brewing lightening strikes vessels,
Risen blood streams revealing bitter truth,
Powered movements rejecting what is right,
Stealing untold memories saved by youth.

(Feed Me) ................Your toxic narcotic.

Diseased heartache controlling all around,
Forcing mouthfuls of power in weak veins,
Dreaming away hope and faith once again,
Draining all these innocent growing pains.

Numbing fewer sensations from the past,
Countless shivers reminding all the wrong,
Unknown numbers surfacing their final peak,
Ticking until pounding thoughts move along.

(Feed Me) ................Your toxic narcotic.

August 11th 2006
Copyright © Natalie

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  • 17 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Numbing fewer sensations from the past,
    Countless shivers reminding all the wrong,
    Unknown numbers surfacing their final peak,
    Ticking until pounding thoughts move along.

    ^^ LOVELY PART. The depth and emotion are brilliant. The flow is amazing as well. You are very good at poetry =)

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Natalie to be honest.
    This is my favourite from the two I have read so far.
    its descriptiveness is so....descriptive...lol
    its perfect
    you should have 45 '5s' instead of what most have given.
    You should be SO proud.
    ~Emah
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Well i already commented on this one soo good job!!!!!!!!!! =)

  • 17 years ago

    by Synh

    Excellent word choice. The flow was excellent. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Leah20

    Not bad, this isn't my favorite of yours but it's still good. I don't know exactly what it is about this poem, but it doesnt seem to have the same flare I guess you could call it as your other ones.