VERY nice.. I liked how you repeated the last line.. I'm not sure what to say.. It was strong and brought an image to my head. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I wanna be more like me
Not some fake reality
Hiding beneath plaster
Submitting to disaster
I'm just a white clone
Wearing Death's cologne
Numb before my death
Sketching out every breath

that lines are very captivating the words are extremly powerful and I love the flow of its line so vivid and the first line years of lost control are great starters nice job cant say anymore just great

Geneross

Oh wow. I loved this peice of work. It was absolutely amazing. It flowed well and kept my attention. I enjoyed reading it quite abit. Keep up the great Work. :]

Awesome paom great imagery good flow and you made the rhyme work really well enjoable read but maybe it would work better as lyrics the way you repeated that huge section, just a sugestion i still liked it heaps xxALLYxx

Very nicely written. Great flow. My favorite line would have to be:

"Kiss me as the night sings
As ice drips from my wings"

Beautiful... 5/5

~ Tina

Awww, wow! this was excellent.. and you are right, my rhymes are very basic compared to yours.. this was filled with emotion, used beautiful descriptive words, and flowed nicely.. great job! 5/5

Very powerfull and deep. Glad you repeated the final stanza - definately my fave. Gave the poem a great ending too.
Excellent write 5/5

Haunting and inspiring poem. This is definitely one of the best I've read in a long time. You have a perfect tone set for this poem and keep it steady throughout. I really liked the line: "I wanna be more like me
Not some fake reality". It speaks volumes by itself, and is really the motto for more than half of our generation. Perfect as it could be.
5/5, definitely

[Tragic]

Wow. There's so much emotion in this poem, that it's almost making ME depressed lol. Great write. The flow and rhymes were perfectly matched and the emotion in it really added a lot to the poem. Great job. Keep it up! =) xoxo

Samantha

Hey Great poem but i can say its a lil sad well i mean it is what you felt when you wrote it but good job and I hope you check ma poems out
Pce out

That was creepy. Excellent poem!!
you deffinatly deserve 5/5.
I liked how you repeated the second stanza in the end, it gave the poem something extra. Emotion just pours from the edges...*i hope that makes sense*...FANtastic WORk!!

Wow, great poem. It is haunting, dark, and quite depressing because It holds much emotion. I thought this was wonderful beyond compare. Keep it up! 5/5

Depressing, haunting
well written
i didnt LOVE it but it was very good
very great flow
some lines were better than others(to me) "Death's Colone..." : awesome imagery.
niCe
~HazE

Wow...i loved it...great descriptions and imagery...you put so much emotion into it...
"I wanna be more like me
Not some fake reality
Hiding beneath plaster
Submitting to disaster
I'm just a white clone
Wearing Death's cologne
Numb before my death
Sketching out every breath"
i really liked this part...excellent job...5/5.

I'm just a white clone
Wearing Death's cologne
Cute.

Awesome poem. Keep up the good work. And to answer your previous question, yes, i read every word of it, some sections twice. I don't just read them fast. I make sure i get everything in and then find the meaning in the poems. It was excellent and I enjoyed reading it all. Just like this one, great job.

Wow awsome poem!! i liked it alot..a 5/5 for me!!

This is a beautifully melancholy and sad poem(as many I write, so I can relate, especially to this as numbness is a sweet oblivion to pain)).I love the repeat of verse 2 and 4.You have such unique images and meanings here, and an excellent rhyme and flow-so natural,the meaning and feelings so very emotional and heartfelt and honest, it really affects one upon reading it..Excellent piece.

GaryJ

I REALLY loved the phrases you used in here. Especially about ice dripping off your wings....amazing! I think you're extremely talented. And I saw a comment you gave someone else about rhyming and I totally agreed with you...I think your rhyme scheme was great so keep it up! 5/5!
~Jules