Sleep On Dearest

by Sarah Ann   Aug 13, 2006


My darling, you sleep
Flawless perfection illuminates your face
It replenishes your soul
And you sleep,
As worry creases fade away
No sorrows show at all

Your fate, it seemed twisted
My darling, grief washed all of our hearts
But you, you always stood strong
Yes, you always stood tall
In light and in darkness
You shone brightly through it all

So sleep on my dearest
Who gives the Earth a greater cause
We know when we need you
You are watching
And we are waiting, for the day to come
Where we will meet again

[(I know it is a non-rhyming poem, and I am sorry if it failed to entertain as other poems do. It is just a piece of work I wrote from the heart. =D Honest comments are nice.)]

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  • 19 years ago

    by Natalie

    Sarah-- Not all poems NEED to rhyme. I was actually GLAD this poem didn't rhyme. These days that's all I ever read. And It's nice to be able to read something that has no rhymes in it.

    I thought your choice of wording was amazing by the way! And I loved the closing stanza. Very well done hun. Keep it up!! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 19 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    An excellent poem, I didn't even notice it was a non-rhyming poem.

  • 19 years ago

    by Jessica

    I thought this was good.. it had good descriptions and i agree that it came from the heart.. the emotion was loud and clear.. the flow was a little bit off.. some lines were longer and some were shorter than others and this threw it off a bit.. nice job on the title though, it really draws the reader in! great work, keep it up! 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Nelle

    That is very sad, and I can definitely relate to this alot..it is very heartfelt..eh, so it doesn't rhyme..if it comes truly from the heart it is fabulous no matter what it is..i loved your word usage great job! 5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Liz

    Honest comments?! Here's mine:

    I hate the fact that my non rhyming poems don't come out as good as this!! This was so good. Kinda sad in a part. It made me think of a friend that died 2 months ago...and yeah... I actually understood this. haha...It usually takes me a few tries to actually enjoy a non-rhyming poem. Idunno where i'm going with this but oh well. I loved it...that's all I can say...lol Keep it up!!

    [[ Poetess ]]

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