As the Rain Falls

by DragonGirl   Aug 16, 2006


As the rain falls
My body shivers
I look around, no one there
I look at the bodys faces of pain and sadness ,entering there souls
The screams i heard could not be forgotten as rain pounds my head. As the battle raged on, no one saw me taking the souls away. farway... more bodys fall and more screams of pain. As the rain moved on so did I

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  • 16 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Aww i could see this unraveling before me as i read very good write!!!!!sooo sad but very good5/5
    laura

  • 17 years ago

    by xxMagioxx

    Awesome poem, you spoke your feelings. I like poems where they come from the heart and not trying to make it rhyme and have and other stuff.

    Tony :D love ya
    (I always return the favor, thxs for commenting on my)

  • 17 years ago

    by kristina

    It's really good for your age and it looks to me like you have a lot of potential so keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by Andi

    This is a good start...but it needs a lot of work...u need to work on lengthing your poems, and making them flow better.....u've got talent....but its gonna take some work....i appreciate it if u could comment on my poems
    andi

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Great poem! I love the flow of it! And i really like the words you used. Its great! Keep them up!! xx

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