Dreams Of The Unfortunate.

by ASPHYXIATED   Oct 3, 2006


He lays his head upon a stone,
The ally way his nightly home,
A can of beer falls from his hand,
His mind slips off to his dream land,
Full of riches ; Sliver and gold,
As he sleeps his fantasies unfold,
Pin stripped suits and well groomed hair,
In the street young children won't stare.

No starvation ; No need for his beer,
Long nights alone he'll no longer fear,
Daily showers ; Well washed teeth,
These things unknown along the street,
His dreams begin to seem further away,
As he begins to sober the following day,
Ripped layers of clothing, his beer on the ground,
Around the old homeless man the children surround.

Mocking and taunting the man in his sorrow,
They direct rocks down the ally so narrow,
He raises his can to escape back to his dreams,
For some ; Life ain't as simple as it seems.

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  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Very melancholy. The straightforward "life ain't as simple as it seems "message that was portrayed throughout the poem then stated at the end was quite pungent.
    As I was reading it seemed as though "beer" appeared an awful lot during the poem making it somewhat tedious...maybe you could edit this somehow?
    Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Very true, sad but so so true.
    This poem was perfect, it showed great imagery, emotion was deep, words were chosen well.
    another great write
    love Tara-Kay

  • 17 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    Sharp, dark, and very honest and true. amazing work, keep on writing, you're doing such a great job!

    ~jas~

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Aww.. this was so sad. you did an amazing job on this and the meaning behind it was very well thought out. You ended it very nicely and it kind of gives people something to think about. Great job on this. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    For some ; Life ain't as simple as it seems.
    ((Instead of using 'ain't', use 'isn't'..It sounds better.))

    I really liked this poem. I have not read anything like this on the topic...and it was very well written and strong. You captured the man well and painted a picture for me.. Again, try using more describing words.
    Good job.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

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