Winter Wonderland {Rictameter}

Awh, Jenna that was beautiful hunny! The flow was good and I loved the form.. The imagery was amazing and really added effect to the poem.. Wonderful work sweetie! 5/5

Umm i dont think that this poem, goes with the style.. if each line doubles syl.lable count shouldnt it go-
1/2/4/8/?/8/4/2/1
yours goes- 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2
if thats the way its suppossed to be then i thnk you should rewrite what the explanation of the styule is...
Other than that---
`This such a comforting poem. it made me happy. Problem areas-
* there should not be a period ending each line, there should be one a tthe end of each thought, use commas instead-
Snow falls,
On the roof-top,
As eager eyes do watch.
The beautiful snow slowly drift(s?).
In a winter wonderland around them.
Decorated with white snowflakes.
Frosty windows steamed with,
A Child's sweet breath...
Snow falls.
*In a winter wonderland around them*
`i do not like the word 'them' it just doesnt sound right to me. i ttruly thinkit should be revised..
*Frosty windows steamed with.(the 'with shouldnt be a tthe endof this line...it throws off the flow and makes it a little choppy.)

Other than that^^ i think it was a very nice poem, better tha many nature poems i've read/written. i9t was so sweet..

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5/5

x.x:Lauren

Wow, Jenna! That was truely wonderful. I've never tried this style, looks kinda fun though. ;P

Excellent job! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

A wondrous poem coming from a brilliant mind, i love this nature poem, and the fact that u were ble to follow a criteria, puts emphasis on ur ability to write, cheers

"Whitey

This poem is like being wrapped up in a comfy blanket, or sort.
I see the image that youre talking about.

"Frosty windows steamed with.
A Child's sweet breath"
These lines says so much, its kinda a child/kid day- dreaming.

k.k

God Bless!