Betrayal

by Vanessa Lea   Oct 15, 2006


My heart is fallen, my soul is dim
I have been betrayed
I thought we had a friendship
But you threw that away

It is the very low of lows
To betray someone who loves you
And it is unforgivable
So what we had is through

Please leave me alone
Don't call me and don't write
Apologies and excuses are not enough
This isn't just a fight

You thought you could have it all your way
Now I'm putting my heart back together
I don't need your lies and cheap disguise
This is goodbye, forever

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  • 13 years ago

    by Lemma

    I really love the punchy finality of the last 2 lines, they really convey the feeling of anger and hurt that is felt throughout the poem. The only thing that I picked up on that might be improved is the first line of the 3rd stanza, most of your first lines are a little longer syllable-wise and the short line disrupts the flow a little. I could be wrong though, that might have been the effect you were going for.

    Overall great write, 5/5

    xXx

  • 17 years ago

    by cutytothebuty

    I really liked the poem...so sorry you and your friend are not friends anymore

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