Will I

by Nelle   Oct 29, 2006


Why can't I be as happy as you?
I always fall with the things that I do.
No matter what I can't keep a smile.
I just want my life to be worth while.

The things I do, I regret them all.
It doesn't matter how hard I try I still fall.
Even love brings me down.
I just want something besides a frown.

Will I ever love the person I've become?
Or will I just give up and be done?
Will I try my hardest to get through everything?
Will I give up on my dream to sing?

I'm running out of options, please help me now?
All I need is someone to show me how.
Please god take my hand and pull me up with you?
I'm tired of going through all that I do.

As for now I will try to smile.
I will try my hardest to live for awhile.
But if I can't, and I start to fall.
Please make me see this pain is worth it all.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    Great poem, and I really can relate. I have felt and still feel these same emotions sometimes...GP

  • 17 years ago

    by milly

    I thought that the message of this poem was very powerful and it obviously contained some raw emotion that was extremely moving. Maybe now that you have the passion and feeling-which are both vital to a good poem-you should try and focus a bit more on the grammar and punctuation to make some of the lines read a bit more smoothly, maybe use a few commas in the middle of lines to make the meaning clearer? Also in places the rhyme seemed slightly forced, for instance the line about wanting to sing...it felt as if you only included this to fit in with the scheme. Please don't think I'm being unnecessarily harsh...I did like the poem and am only suggesting ways for improvement as you asked for honest comments...hope this helps!
    much love x

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