Ebony Sins

To be quite frank with you, dear.
I've read this poem twice and it made no sense to me.
It was as though you were just.. well babbling.

I liked your format, but it could've been better.
For example:
Adding punctuation.
I know I shouldn't be preaching.
But it does make it look nicer.

Your flow was okay.
A great flow in my eyes are reading the whole poem flawlessly without stopping.
I had to stop a couple of times to make sure what I read was right for it didn't SOUND right.

Your spelling was perfect.

All all in,
I'm sorry, dear.
Your poem's lack of excitement brought the rating down.
It's a 4/5

Wow! I really really really like this one. The pure though and emotion that this poem witholds is amazing. Great job and good use of vocabulary. Very nice yet again. Maybe we can exchange ways of writing and our thoughts of poetry.

Ohh gave me a picture in my mind. Choice of words were really good. Nice job overall XD.

Superb!

This has so many mental images for me, that really really works.

kepp up the good work!

xx

Plese stop calling me hunny....it kinda creepy