For this Eight, I'm afraid your to Late

by angelina   Jan 18, 2007


He picks up the razor.
She grabs the knife.
You won't see them later,
their ending their strife.

With a noose in his hand.
A gun to her head.
Their going to a land,
a land of the dead.

On the side of the bridge she waits.
Edge of the building he paced.
Only to state,
this is their fate.

He scoops a handful of pills.
Shaking she holds the needle.
Not wanting to feel,
the evil.

DEEP slash,
razor ends the past.

Sliced across her THROAT,
knife causes a fatal choke.

His body HANGS loose,
from the end of a noose.

With a SHIVER,
she pulls the trigger.

From the bridge she DIVED,
she won't survive.

His pacing STOPPED,
from a building his body dropped.

The pills are GONE,
he won't respond.

Ending great pain,
she fills air in her VEINS.

Do you know why,
they didn't cry?

** When existence is a lie,
it leads to suicide.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Really different and unusual for good,words with Caps-lock open made it different,i especially liked

    ** When existence is a lie,
    it leads to suicide.

    It's totally true
    Keep it up
    See ya
    Laura

  • 17 years ago

    by azii

    Wow! Great job! I really liked this one! It's soo beautifully written..
    You really have lots of talent!
    Keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I loved the secound stanza of this poem:

    "With a noose in his hand.
    A gun to her head.
    Their going to a land,
    a land of the dead."

    It really got me hooked and edge me to read more of this poem. This was written excellently, and the imagery was great, you could imagine it all. Veyr powerful and very deep read. I liked the ending, when you made some words in caps as they were more important, it has great effect. i htought you could of used better punctuation, but still an excellent read! Kepe up the good work! xx

  • 17 years ago

    by shawn

    Great poem, not sure how i came across this but i am glad i did. 5/5 this was wonderful

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This poem is WOW, written so greatly, you have showed a great efford, and you have proved you are so talented. i realy like this poem, keep up the great job.5/5

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