You Say You Don't Want To See Me Hurt [Rondeau]

Me & call = please begin writing out and... just a suggestion.

***You carry my heart & for that I fret
I don't want you to leave me just yet*** = i suggest rewording these so that they aren't so... forced and corny (sorry for being so critical)

I despise loving you, hate that we met
= I despise loving you and I hate that we met

No longer be a hypocrite; no longer betray= no longer hypocritical, no longer be betrayed....

......You're the only one hurting me here...... = you're the only one hurting me (ex-nay the here)

Great job once again dear.

5/5
~Stephen White

This poem has a lot of emotion in it.... the flow is good and the wording is good. all together it is a good poem

Awww this was so sad I can totally relate to it though you used nice words I loved it!

Like I said before. Your writing style is very unique. You write excellent poems.

"I despise loving you, hate that we met
I didn't mean anything to you; just a stupid bet
I hate you, I love you - - Go, leave [please stay]"

That's my favorite part, but it was hard to choose one. I love how everything is worded. Excellent job!

Brreeezzyyy!!!! This was such a sad poem, and I can definitely relate to the emotions in this poem. The love-hate confusion. There are some very powerful lines in this poem and I definitely feel the same way. The regret of meeting that person, the forgiving them, the wanting them to change. Wow, this was really well done hun. I really hope you're doing ok. I know I'm doing a lot better, but I just can't write love poems the way I use to. That's how hurt I was. *sigh* hopefully a new inspiration comes my way! lol Take care hun! Love ya!