Foolish heart.

by Red Tears Of The Soul   Mar 16, 2007


It's been a while, hasn't it?
Since we seen the last one go
Away from our troubled world
Ended with a simple "no"

We have gotton stronger
Well, I would like to say...
But all these days that passed
Been harder to keep you at bay

Why? my old friend.
Must you beat, hunger, and hold?
showing all these feelings
That send shivers down my soul

Because I know how you are
I know exactly what you'll do
Always looking and looking
For something real, something true

Why must you take me?
On these journeys I can't comprehend
Why must you race?
Why can you never mend?

The last one left a scar
One that has yet to heal
She broke you apart
And yet you still conceal

Please don't look for another
Don't let anyone come close
Because you know the old line
About the one that can hurt you the most

Please hear my words
Don't you hear me calling?
Please hear my cries
Before you start falling

I know you had what was "true"
And that you crave for more
But you must stop this madness
Because you've been wrong before

I'm sorry if I went too far
I only want what's best
Why can't you listen?
Why can't you rest?

I know it's hard to take
It nearly tore us apart
But we need this time to heal
Please... My foolish heart.

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  • 18 years ago

    by undying blusher

    Oh, I do admire a beautiful poet's mind.
    :claps:

    Fifth stanza, typo-
    "Why must you take me?
    On these journeys I can't comprhend"
    *comprehend

    Seventh stanza, I believe the last letter is missing...
    Don't hurt me!

    Thank you for the comment, m'cucumber!

    blush x

  • 18 years ago

    by tIrEd BoY wItH wIrEd EyEs

    Wow ur poem just is so true to life its not far fetched at all i think we all who has loved can relate to this poems very very good (by the way wat is the the old line kinda bugs me not knowing lol)

  • 18 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    This is REALLY good. [I love the title, btw]. It flowed really nicely & nothing really seemed forced.

    On these journeys I can't comprhend [comprehend*]

    About the one that can hurt you the mos [most*]

    I'm sorry if I went to far ['to' should be 'too' in this case]

    Can't you see my hand clutching my chest?

    ^ In my opinion, I feel that this line is a bit too long for this poem. Maybe re-word it? shorten it? say something different? Lol. I just believe that it messes up the flow seeing as how it's a lot longer than the other lines.

    Other than that, I really did love this. Specially the whole concept of it.. Talking to your heart.. 'foolish' heart :]

    Lovely, dear. 5/5

    Keep it up.

    Bri [x]

  • 18 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    The flow and the wording were good but there is just a thing,change 'must's to should and it would be perfect
    Keep it up
    Laura

  • 18 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This is perfectly written a great poem, you have showed a great talent which is unique. i really enjoyed reading it... keep up the great job and a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

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