Music Of The Night (A Fairytale in 1940)

This is a really beautiful poem. It has got a lot of emotion in it. 5/5

Beautiful Work

Kalee

"Felt the rhythm in my head in this lovely mansion
Started to dance with him when his smile's bright
Our kisses'll melt the sky,the sound of our passion
He will be my music of all through the night"

I like those lines.^
amazing poem.
You have talent Your a good writer and
I love your word choice.
keep writing!!
5/5
take care!

~Chelsea

Wondeful poem. i really enjoyed reading it. you did a really good job. your very talented.

To hear his breathing when he's sleeping
A violin's relaxing voice from the next door
A strong whisper comes cos of the wind blowing
Or just to listen my happy dog's snore

He woke up when he felt me near
Kissed my hand that with his ring charmingly
He quickly took of the dress I was to wear
Had me completely when stars wink at me

i love those line. i love the detail and the words. keep up the good work. 5/5

Darlin, I love the idea. I really do. The actual content, though, is very confused.

"Cos" is a very awkward word. What's wrong with Because? And you have some spelling mistakes.

Yet, that's nitpicky.

I do like your title. Phantom of the Opera. Beautiful.

The detail and determination to make this an accurate description is amazing. I expeccially liked "A violin's relaxing voice from the next door". It gives the mood of the occasion without being direct. Check the spelling in the third line of the third stanza ;-D

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]