Fallen Love

by TamborineMan   Apr 4, 2007


Five branches once grew
each limb weaker than the next
morning once brought dew,
but each year saw less and less

clear skies gave warm life
but the weather would not hold
and the dried ground cracked.
and the young branches turned old.

where once was thick grass
dust blows and steady earth sways
five branches grow heavy,
earth a quiet place to lay

spring came with hope lost
creeping dawn brought slow ruin
sunlight burned my cross
night brings day; both come too soon

five branches now die
each lifeless as the last
at first the cool weather held
five times I die; future now past

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  • 16 years ago

    by Zvetty

    A brilliet pice of work .... congraz 5/5

    *zvetty*

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr M

    Again, qite well written but I'm afraid I do not understand the symbolism of the five branches and what they represent. Not overly simplistic or deminutive of the reader.

  • 16 years ago

    by Shirani Graham

    A shorT buT beautifuL piecE 5/5 brilliantlY penneD. keeP writinG!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This was so heartbreaking, yet such a pleasure to read.
    I thought the flow was good throughout, the imagery used was beautifully done and the emotion screams through the words.
    I noticed that there seemed to be quite a few fillers in certain places, which at the odd time did throw the flow off just a little.
    Apart from that however, I think you did a wonderful job with this.

  • 16 years ago

    by geeeeee

    Five branches die
    each lifeless as the last
    at first the cool weather held
    five times I die, future now past

    Imagery was very good. I could feel and sense all of the emotion behind the words of this poem. Great write

    Take Care.

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