Genesis

by Marc Ortiz   Apr 26, 2007


Alone in this great emerald island
I'm walking alone above the white sand
The vast waves smash those little bright green rocks
The warm breeze is the only thing I feel

I have run to the great ocean's sunset
Three months had passed since our great divide..
Would someone please kill me.. Swift and painless..
Anyone out there who will end my life?

Someone emerges in my blurry sight
An angel who will save me from this hell?
She's so beautiful a cherub in earth..
She noticed me taking in her lovely eyes

She came near to me.. I started to shake
She had wrapped her soft arms around me
She became my reason to move forward
She had saved me from my tormenting pain

I love to see my mistress priceless smile
Those memories will reside in my heart
She's my destiny.. My fated soul mate
I need to find her.. Ask her real name

Why did she left without telling me
Just like my so-called friends who come and go
Days go by and still no sign of her..
And then one day I saw her gorgeous face!

I run to her as fast as I can run
Im nearing her I can see her blue eyes
Suddenly I realize it was just a blissful dream
I stand up as fast as I can..

Tears start to pour in my dejected eyes..
Screaming as loud as I can
I kneel down covering my crestfallen face..
It was just a blissful delusion..

...Another day here without her..

*I did this one in my business class lol. hope you enjoy its not that good but :) I really hope you enjoy*

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  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Hahaha yeah! I got the idea from the 'Island man' and uhm some lines are from that poem :P

  • 16 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Ok this reminds me of the poem "Island Man" by Grace Nichols. And for this reason i didnt like it. I dont know.. when i read the begining of the poem i remembered the word "emerald" being used to describe an island. This stuck out at me, and i didnt know where i could remember it form. But then the words "heaves himself" reminded me of the poem. I know you havnt fully copyed the poem but still... Using some phrases does seem like you got it from the poem. And also the word "Groggily.. Groggily..". Again this is used in this exact poem! This oculd be a good poem but dont copy phrases form other poerms... it just doesnt work...

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Rapture should be wrapped. other than that I can see nothing to improve. You did an excellent job,. the poem was beautifully written, and so sad. the emtions were raw and strong, the imagery was vivid, and the word choice was excellnt. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    Excellent poem thanks for your comment on "My soul mate"

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    I noticed a couple of spelling n grammar errors...besides tht.The poem was superb!...n lol writing such beautiful stuff during class is like Kooolll.......Luv it anyways...just cool....
    Kp up de good wrk..
    Tk care.God bless
    xxPoojaxx