The Clown

This was emotional poem. Many people can relate. Good choice of words. By the way, I hate clowns. It's beautiful the way ou written this poem. Good Job! 5/5

Take care,

-Sarah A.

This gentle one speaking now
Is just an act{;} a show for you{.}
A costume of deceit and lies{;}
Covering up what inside is true...

Everything about me is an illusion,
Starting with the joy I bring,
Through the smiles I make,
And all the laughter I sing{.}

Behind my big, red nose
Hides a face full of fear,
I spray myself with water{,}
So you can't see my tears{.}

The silly jokes I tell
Aren't really jokes at all.
They're a story of my life
And how everything began to fall.

I'm not an actor or an imposter {--}
Not a fake walking around town{.}
I'm just your average village idiot{;}
I'm society's lame clown.

That's pretty accurate on perfect punctuation. You're grammar, rocks, too! =]
If you ever need help, you are welcome to ask me to edit a poem. I love grammar [I'm a geek] so, ask any time! Just private message me. =]

xTheEcstaysofSuicidex

Oh, my. There are a lot of punctuation mistakes.. I know some authors don't care about punctuation, but GOD would it help the flow. Just a suggestion...

Anyways.
The flow was a little off for me, but the rhyming was very nice. The message and topic were absolutely amazing; I really enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sharing.

[[If you add punctuation, I'll put you in the running for the weekly contest.. Sorry, punctuation is a big thing for me. =/]]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

I liked this poem... It reminds me of that famous painting with the crying clown. I forget what its called or who painted it though. Its amazing how much of ourselves we can hide from the world behind something as simple as make up. Wonderful poem I thought it was going to be a funny one when I read the title but this is much better than I expected. Nice work.

Ooo I loved the end...that's really cool, its really different and different is good :) great write